Lost In Reverie (version 2)

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  1. Danielle Evans Danielle Evans

    A second round of options with a few stylistic changes and some tightening of letters. The 'r' and 'i' relationship are particularly of interest to me- is it legible while stylistic? Any thoughts are appreciated and considered!

    Thanks to @Claire Coullon for the great thoughts on the 'Re' ligature.

    about 1 year ago

  2. Claire Coullon Claire Coullon

    Awesome, the 'R-e' reads beautifully. While I do like the shape of that 'e' swash in the bottom one, overall I prefer the top one. I think that 'r-i' just works, but having the extra element below adds some unnecessary busyness.

    To elaborate on the 'r-i', I think the most important thing about it is that it's legible in context. If I saw that pair by itself, I might not read it correctly but within the full words and the overall style, to me it works. If anything, perhaps it'd be interesting to try the top stroke a little shorter (so that it starts just after the 'v') to make it a bit more 'r' like, but not sure it needs it.

    (Also, thanks a lot for the email back! Just saw it.)

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    about 1 year ago

  3. Trish Duffy Trish Duffy

    Love the calligraphic style! I was reading the "ri" as a "u" at first, possibly because of the way the "r" curves into the "i" at the bottom. Maybe the connecting line just needs to be a little thinner. Overall, I think the top version reads better. The extra swash on the bottom version throws off the balance of the overall composition a bit.

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    about 1 year ago

  4. Tiffany Wardle de Sousa Tiffany Wardle de Sousa

    My 2ยข because you asked. ;)

    I don't sense x-height, baseline, ascender, or descender lines. I think because this isn't totally free form that you need to have these. Or, consider how you could bend the phrase to create an interesting shape. Googling for "master arabic calligraphy" shows some beautiful examples.

    You might want to read this, it could help: http://islamic-arts.org/2012/arabic-calligraphy-and-type-design/

    I might consider focussing on how the pairs lock into one another a bit more too. The /Lo/ pair, for instance, feels very loose while the /in/ feels very tight.

    I really like the wild /ri/ pair. It feels free, but not without thought.

    The swash on the second /e/ feels unnecessary.

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    about 1 year ago

  5. Danielle Evans Danielle Evans

    @Claire, thanks so much for affirming this, as the 'ri' is one of my favorite spots. Posting this different places (here, forrst, loviv, hunie) has been difficult because so many people are insistant that spot should be more legible. I don't know that I agree, so thank you! I'm excited to hear from you- thanks for reaching out!

    @Trish, yes, the bottom swash is too much and makes that whole area feel really congested. Of course I had IKEA syndrome before posting and thought it was a great idea. Thanks!

    @Tiffany, these are excellent thoughts, particularly with the looseness and tightness. I totally agree. Also, thank you for the article- it will help. I've had some Arabic experience, though I am rusty, and while I had multiple x-height lines I was too loose. I didn't know Arabic worked like Hebrew (boxlike and dependent on quarter percentages) and am eager to utilize (or discard) structure.

    Please don't be shy with your comments- they are quite valuable. :)

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    about 1 year ago

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