Hey guys, thanks for all the amazing feedback, I greatly appreciate it! Having taking in everyone had to contribute I think I have finally 'nailed' it (see what I did there). Flat top, improved shadow, better angle etc.
Travel update: For anyone concerned all is well with my travels. San Francisco is all sorted and left on good terms. I have spent the last week and a bit driving (a rather fast car) through Death Valley and such and lost a little money gambling in Las Vegas. Tomorrow I fly to Vancouver where I will be based for a month+
Stay awesome everyone and thanks for all of the help!
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