Thanks so much dribbblers for your help getting me closer to the ideal mark. Branding oneself is so difficult. With several suggestions this piece has solved the issues of the e's, l's, and balanced with a large M.
My final concern is now with the b in bleue and subsequent swashes. I can't seem to get the right combination. Any thoughts are very appreciated!!
3 months ago
I think 3. is the strongest solution. I would consider the treatment of the first "M" in 2. for 3. Instead of having "B" reach for "M," "M" would be directing the eye to "B."
Another thought: I like your lowercase treatment of "b" in 2. Out of the 3 lowercase versions, it's easiest to read.
Thanks @Jeremiah! :D I should note I'm not thrilled with how the b's are currently (no. 1 was thrown up as-is to be honest). I couldn't figure out how to finish any of the b's without swashes, as they looked incomplete. :\
You're welcome! :)
I'm rooting for 3!
If you ask me, I would take 1, because it connects both words in a very elegant way. also I like and prefer the M-b connection, over the others! and the b also fits the rest of bleue very well.
I'd say #3 is the strongest. I like the M the best in this one. However, the B isn't doing it for me. Maybe thicken the top of the B and shorten the swoosh to something similar to the M. I think one swoosh (coming from the L) is enough. I think it gets a little overpowering...
Overall, looks awesome!
Great to see these Danielle (and I love how you ended up with multiple variations). I really like the new 'M', great shape. I think it's much more logical for the start of the name and visually, it feels much better balanced.
Personally, I'd love to see "Marmalade" from #3 with "bleue" from the original (I know, I'm a pain right?!). Of course, the original bottom 'L' would have to be adjusted a little though to match the changes you made to the new top one, but I really liked the simplicity of its original swash.
I do like the idea of the swashes in #1 and #2, but I think there's enough going on in your beautiful, fun letterforms that they aren't really necessary.
Anyway, just some thoughts as usual – looking forward to seeing what you do with this!
@Luke @Daniel @Gilad Thank you all so much for your input. I deeply value all your thoughts and encouragement.
@Claire I've updated with an attachment. Nice call, as usual. Thanks again for the thorough crit. :)
Ooo, #5. I like it. The "b" is a little difficult for me to read still, but, I'm OK with that, if that makes sense. heh
I find some of the swashes distract from reading the words. A case of less is more. I really don't like "eue" on a different baseline to the "bl".
Keep at it... I can sympathize with the self branding pain process.
nice to see all these options, I would have to say I also am not sure about the u being so much bigger than the two e's it becomes a bit distracting, I really like the swash on the M in the middle one, really flows well, maybe have the swash under bleue not so thick, it reads heavy to me. keep it up!
Thanks @Dan- good point! @Neil, I have fixed the 'u' and am currently playing with reducing some width on the swashes. Thanks so much!!!
Love your process work. Thank you for all the kind words on Twitter as well, I'm not on there much and just came across your posts.
@kirk visola Thanks so much, Kirk!
@Justin Crutchley Thanks, I mean them all. We northeastern Ohioans have to stick together, however remotely. :)
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