Holy Spirit

13 Responses

1. Dave Coleman

   Rargh the 'S' is pissing me off! Can't seem to get it right.

   4 months ago

2. Kishan Patel

   So good, love the weight,i think the s looks great.

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   4 months ago

3. Dave Coleman

   @Kishan Patel - Really? It just doesn't quite sit right with me... but it might just be me looking at it too long. Thanks so much! P.S. love your work.

   4 months ago

4. Nick Winters

   Digging this. Don't think the S needs the little curly whip at the end though. Just keep it simple. Very nice!

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   4 months ago

5. Anton Warkentin

   Super digging this Dave... Maybe flip the tail on the S like this?
   http://imgur.com/nEPBSoE

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   4 months ago

6. Rowan Hamilton

   i'd just smooth the curve on that little loop down the bottom and the inside curve at the top of the S.

   4 months ago

7. Derrick Kempf

   This is beautiful, but I agree with you! I think it has to do with the weight of the spine. If you just beef up the spine of the S a little it will carry more weight in that area and draw less attention to it. It's just a little lighter than the p, as well as the h, l, r, t, which I think makes it seem off. P.S. my favorite letters are the t and the r. So rad!

   4 months ago

8. Danielle Evans

   Does the 'S' absolutely need the loop? If so, maybe use the loop embellishment under 'Spirit' as a guide. I think the shape would be more pleasing and harmonious. Good luck- it's quite beautiful thus far!

   4 months ago

9. Amber Asay

   If it helps any, I like the bottom left from the sketches. The closed loop seems more subtle and cohesive with the words. Beautiful work!

   4 months ago

10. Michael Meek

    Simply Beautiful, but can't wait to see the rebound. Great Job!

    4 months ago

11. Tyler Anthony

    Like it brotha.

    4 months ago

12. Greg Thomas

    Looks good, but I agree the "S" feels a bit out of place. It's almost there, though. Maybe mimicking the shape of the cross bar on the "t" but a hook instead of a loop, like some of your other sketches. Good stuff, @Dave Coleman.

    4 months ago

13. Holy Spirit - Fixed Fixed up the 'S', much happier with it now. Also tweaked the rest. Any more suggestions before it goes to the client? Thanks @Nick Winters, @Anton Warkentin...

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    Holy Spirit - Fixed

    by Dave Coleman

    Fixed up the 'S', much happier with it now. Also tweaked the rest. Any more suggestions before it goes to the client?

    Thanks @Nick Winters, @Anton Warkentin, @Rowan Hamilton, @Derrick Kempf, @Danielle Evans, @Amber Asay & @Greg Thomas for the helpful advice.

    Check out the nice big full colour finished design on my blog: http://dvclmn.tumblr.com

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