Thanks to all that helped bring this about from version one with all your great comments and feedback. Looking for more of the same so I can bring this puppy home! Many thx in advance!! Full Version Attached.
Great to see this one Mike! It's come along so well. I especially like what you've done inside the 'O', it's such a nice touch. The ampersand positioning/size seems much better now too.
It's a small detail, but the flourish inside the 'R' in the banner feels a little distracting. I really like it as a character, but to me it seems a bit out of place in the context of the tagline as a whole (like it commands too much attention). Love the type overall on that phrase though.
Looking good Mike! I'm a bit distracted by the "A" Tail loop with the wavy lines on it though? Not sure what it is supposed to represent or just for decoration. Might be too much black if it were solid (not sure). Really like how the ribbon turned out.
Looking good, Mike! Only critique would be that the 'N's should have the weight on the angled downward stroke—stems should be thin (note the heavier downward stroke of the 'V' which you have correct—the angled stroke of the 'N' should match this). I would also echo @Mark on the 'A' swash decoration (unless I'm also missing its intended depiction of something). It's a bit busy, and I think you'd be better off having it solid (possibly changing it's shape if you think a different shape would better fit a solid fill) in order to give more needed attention to the beautiful banner you have. =)
Thanks to all!! I hear you all loud and clear and will fixin' those things up tonight via skype with the client. Many thanks again for the feedback. As far as the flourishy thing on the "A" its supposed to be a kinda Victorian style flourish, must have failed...lol! Also prop for the "N" catch fellas - and @Claire Coullon I fixed that "R" and the font on the banner is from http://www.letterheadfonts.com and it called "BootCut" - it was also my base for my lettering this go around per the clients request. So check out that great font resource if you have not already.
looks great, I also agree the flourish in the R brings a lot of attention although it is nice looking, I keep staring at it when I try to read the rest, so it is a bit distracting
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Mike Jones
Thanks to all that helped bring this about from version one with all your great comments and feedback. Looking for more of the same so I can bring this puppy home! Many thx in advance!! Full Version Attached.
7 months ago
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Joseph Alessio
Looking great! I might lose the curved cross-stroke of the N, somehow doesn't seem to fit in. Love the &, A, V, etc. Good stuff!
7 months ago
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Gert van Duinen
That's something really awesome Mike!
7 months ago
Great to see this one Mike! It's come along so well. I especially like what you've done inside the 'O', it's such a nice touch. The ampersand positioning/size seems much better now too.
It's a small detail, but the flourish inside the 'R' in the banner feels a little distracting. I really like it as a character, but to me it seems a bit out of place in the context of the tagline as a whole (like it commands too much attention). Love the type overall on that phrase though.
7 months ago
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Mathias Temmen
Yesssss!
7 months ago
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Mark Jooste
Looking good Mike! I'm a bit distracted by the "A" Tail loop with the wavy lines on it though? Not sure what it is supposed to represent or just for decoration. Might be too much black if it were solid (not sure). Really like how the ribbon turned out.
7 months ago
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Michael Spitz
Looks great Mike.
7 months ago
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Sean McCabe
Looking good, Mike! Only critique would be that the 'N's should have the weight on the angled downward stroke—stems should be thin (note the heavier downward stroke of the 'V' which you have correct—the angled stroke of the 'N' should match this). I would also echo @Mark on the 'A' swash decoration (unless I'm also missing its intended depiction of something). It's a bit busy, and I think you'd be better off having it solid (possibly changing it's shape if you think a different shape would better fit a solid fill) in order to give more needed attention to the beautiful banner you have. =)
7 months ago
Great work, mike
7 months ago
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Mike Jones
Thanks to all!! I hear you all loud and clear and will fixin' those things up tonight via skype with the client. Many thanks again for the feedback. As far as the flourishy thing on the "A" its supposed to be a kinda Victorian style flourish, must have failed...lol! Also prop for the "N" catch fellas - and @Claire Coullon I fixed that "R" and the font on the banner is from http://www.letterheadfonts.com and it called "BootCut" - it was also my base for my lettering this go around per the clients request. So check out that great font resource if you have not already.
7 months ago
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Nick Slater
Damn that looks great!
7 months ago
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Mitch Barbour
This looks awesome bro! Great job!
7 months ago
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Neil Tasker
looks great, I also agree the flourish in the R brings a lot of attention although it is nice looking, I keep staring at it when I try to read the rest, so it is a bit distracting
7 months ago
Looks good!
7 months ago
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Kevin Layshock
some of that line work in the swash on the A is well-contrasted and quite lovely.
4 months ago