Working on a logo for a friend's nik-nak/apparel shop - there is all kinds of wrong with this, so hit me up with how to make it better & fix it please! Feedback & Comments most appreciated!
over 1 year ago
Very flowing i like it!
D'oh! I like this typography!
Don't be so hard on yourself, this is some sick sh*t!
The main problem area that I notice is the R. Other than that, this is looking really solid. Great typography.
really nice! At first glance, the L looked like a lower case f, but maybe that's just me.
@Adam Walsh so what could I do to fix that "R" and thanks for the props bro!
@Matt Dammer i can see that so thoughts or suggestions to fix?? maybe leave off top loop thru or get rid of that little spike thingy in the middle?? thanks bro!!
Love the T E connection.
Mike At first glance it looks very cool! The only thing I could suggest is to try and tie in the R and N more, they look a bit separated from the T's "swooshieness" ( that's a technical term ) other then that it's your usual Awesomeness! :)
Try to use the same curve angle as used on the U for the R ( sans the serif obviously) if that makes sense. Also, maybe have the leg flat at the bottom to match the rest of the lettering. I hope you find this helpful 'cuz this is so close to perfection!
@Mark Jooste word! I will work on that combo! thx bro!!
@Adam Walsh so get rid of the "R" leg swoosh and hook up a flat bottom?? many thx!!
Not even sure if it would look good, but what if the top loop of the "L" was around the cotton ball as the "o"? I think everyone else has caught the other things. Overall, pretty rad design! I especially like the cotton ball.
This is great man, don't be too hard on yourself man!! :-) @Mike Jones
Lookin good dude. The thing that jars for me is the swoosh at the bottom. The flow seems to go thin to thick and back to thin and thick again which doesn't feel quite right. Do you know what I mean?
@Owen Jones yeah bro that whole bottom piece feels off to me too, trying to figure out what to do to fix it, suggestions, thoughts?? thx for the feedback!
This is cotton candy Mike! The only thing I would revisit is the loop of the L, seems a tad heavy.
@Alen Type08 Pavlovic the loop being the left side of the "L" that crosses thru the "S" correct?? thx for the feedback bro!
Nah bro, my bad, the one below the 'company'. It seems heavy compared to the light text above it.
PS maybe you can also play with some cuts in the area you have mentioned, where L meets S. It would add more dimension as a support to that 'fake 3D' cotton flower.
Your work with typography is great. 2 thoughts -- the cotton flower looks too separated between the "S" and the "u" to read as the "o" in Southern. Also -- it takes a moment to see the "L" in Life -- maybe its because the bottom of the L dips down instead of conforming to the shape of the text? Just a thought - great work.
Mike! Great work, homie!
Couple things for me. First, that 'S' is killer. Love it. I think the main problem people are having with the 'L's readability is that decoration that sits at about 6 O'clock on that top loop. I think losing that or maybe even just toning it down a bit clears that right up.
The only other thing that's bugging me is the top bar of the first 'E'. If you didn't have another 'E' in the design, I think you might get away with it, but since there's another directly under it, the top one seems off. I think you've got plenty of height to play with in the 'U' and 'H', so maybe jack the arched left side of the 'T's crossbar up a bit, so that you can more naturally flow it into a straight bar for the 'E', instead of it heading back upward.
Does that make sense? SO close, man! Need to work on my non-script lettering a LOT. Don't think I could pull this off, personally. :)
by Mike Jones
So after all the great feedback (THANKS EVERYONE) here is some revised versions. Thoughts on these? Much appreciated!
over 1 year ago
@Ryan Hamrick yo! thx for the rad feedback....I rebounded some more choices & have reworked 'em. Any more thoughts are much appreciated bro!
Very nice Mike. This is legit.
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