This is a straight black and white version of a logo mark where the only real requirement was to use a tree.
over 1 year ago
great debut ! welcome to the community :)
So, just a quick note, @Maciej Jasiński says that to everyone that debuts (http://cl.ly/HcGB), to gain more followers and likes I assume. Anyways, on to the point, here's some critique:
-The design is not balanced. You might want to do some research regarding the golden ratio. Just do a quick search on Dribbble regarding the golden ratio, and if you look at some of my works, you can find some examples as well.
-I had no idea what this was until I read the description after about 5 minutes of staring at it. If your requirement was to use a tree, this mark is definitely not showing that it's supposed to represent a tree really well.
-The mark has no personality. I clearly see the E and S, but I have no idea what I'm looking at. It doesn't tell me anything about the individual or company it's representing, and that's huge.
-Presentation is everything. I can see plainly that the lines aren't straight (there seems to be fragments leftover from the path you created in illustrator), and the thickness of the lines aren't consistent. Remember, Dribbble is an exclusive community of designers, yes, but it is also a portal that can lead you to potential clients, as well as a great source to get some critique and learn from others. You want every one of your works to be optimum quality even if it's just a draft, because clients are watching, designers are watching, and their first reaction to bad presentation is to look away and move along.
Welcome to Dribbble though, I'm looking forward to seeing your best~
aaaw.. i'm really sorry @John Healy now i can't like your design because @Patrick Rogan says it's not good, and he's an expert.. such a pity. btw i love the logo, for me it's fresh and dynamic (and i'm not a pro so i can't say that). maybe the letters could be a bit thicker. that's all. waiting for your next shot mate!
Thanks Pat. I'm glad to see some honest criticism here. I was worried everyone would be too nice. Those curves can definitely use some massaging. It's a work in progress so that can still happen. You don't know who it is for because I left out the logo type with the company name on purpose. I'm just not sure about the etiquette regarding client work and this site yet. I'll get it eventually. High Fives @Patrick Rogan
@Maciej Jasiński I wasn't trying to be incendiary, Maciej, but it does not help anyone to post the same cookie-cut message to everyone especially when it is not applicable. It counts as spamming and is detrimental to the community. I have nothing against you, I'm just calling it how I see it.
nice and lovely! welcome to the house!
@Maciej Jasiński @Nuruzzaman Sheikh I'm glad you guys like what I'm working with here. Thanks for the comments. Take care.
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