Really nice, those little changes look fantastic! Very good call with the weight adjustments to the connecting strokes and the 'n' works much better too.
I love the refinements! One crit I would have to give you is that something about the cross bar of the "x" seems off to me. It doesn't seem to quite fit with the rest of the letters and creates an awkward shape where it intersects.
@Jeff Jenkins Understandable. To each his own, I dont hate it by any means, thats just what caught my eye. I figure it better to mention it and have someone disagree, than to not mention it at all. This just makes me want to go sketch out the letter "X" over and over and see what I come up with!
@Samm McAlear Absolutely ... I always welcome any and all feedback. It's one of the things that makes dribbble great, and I appreciate that you took the time to comment. After staring at this some more, I think maybe I see something. Perhaps the upper part of the crossbar could be moved down a bit. It's actually a straight line, but visually it looks like there's a break in it as it crosses the other part of the letter and comes out the other side. I still think that style wise, it fits in just fine with the other letters. When I was sketching this I tried different crossbars, and this one appealed to me the most. I hope you'll critique my future posts ... you have a good eye :)
@Jeff Jenkins Sounds good man! I'm sometimes a little hesitant to comment on others work because I feel like I'm not on the same level design wise since I'm just a student, but thanks to dribbble i'm starting to break that habit (maybe it's because I'm hidden behind a computer). I printed it out and tried drawing a couple of cross bars over it but couldn't find anything that fit better so I agree that this is the best crossbar for this situation, but I think you could move it down just a tad like you had mentioned and you'll be golden!
@Samm McAlear Wow, thanks for putting in that effort! Glad you're getting more comfortable with giving feedback. I've found that looking at the work (good or bad) of others with a critical eye is a great learning tool. Cheers, man :)
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Jeff Jenkins
Made a few minor changes:
• Increased the line weight on the left side of the P.
• Smoothed out the curve on the left side of the P.
• Adjusted the line weight of the y loop to match that of the P, which changed very slightly when the adjustment described above was made.
• Thickened the upstroke at i-x.
• Made the curve of the n stem less pronounced.
• Adjusted the connection at i-n, which was necessary after adjusting the stem of the n.
12 months ago
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Jeff Jenkins
Thanks @Claire Coullon for noticing the line weight problem with the P. Much appreciated!
12 months ago
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Tobia Crivellari
That tiny changes make the difference! great work @Jeff Jenkins (plus @Claire Coullon)
12 months ago
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Jeff Jenkins
@Tobia Crivellari Thanks! You know what they say ... the devil is in the details.
12 months ago
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Tobia Crivellari
You're welcome @Jeff Jenkins ! You're damn right mate! :-)
12 months ago
Really nice, those little changes look fantastic! Very good call with the weight adjustments to the connecting strokes and the 'n' works much better too.
12 months ago
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Jeff Jenkins
@Claire Coullon Thanks Claire. Cheers :)
12 months ago
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Samm McAlear
I love the refinements! One crit I would have to give you is that something about the cross bar of the "x" seems off to me. It doesn't seem to quite fit with the rest of the letters and creates an awkward shape where it intersects.
12 months ago
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Jeff Jenkins
@Samm McAlear Thanks Samm, I appreciate the feedback. Not sure that I agree though. I think it's just the nature of the letter x.
12 months ago
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Samm McAlear
@Jeff Jenkins Understandable. To each his own, I dont hate it by any means, thats just what caught my eye. I figure it better to mention it and have someone disagree, than to not mention it at all. This just makes me want to go sketch out the letter "X" over and over and see what I come up with!
12 months ago
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Jeff Jenkins
@Samm McAlear Absolutely ... I always welcome any and all feedback. It's one of the things that makes dribbble great, and I appreciate that you took the time to comment. After staring at this some more, I think maybe I see something. Perhaps the upper part of the crossbar could be moved down a bit. It's actually a straight line, but visually it looks like there's a break in it as it crosses the other part of the letter and comes out the other side. I still think that style wise, it fits in just fine with the other letters. When I was sketching this I tried different crossbars, and this one appealed to me the most. I hope you'll critique my future posts ... you have a good eye :)
12 months ago
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Samm McAlear
@Jeff Jenkins Sounds good man! I'm sometimes a little hesitant to comment on others work because I feel like I'm not on the same level design wise since I'm just a student, but thanks to dribbble i'm starting to break that habit (maybe it's because I'm hidden behind a computer). I printed it out and tried drawing a couple of cross bars over it but couldn't find anything that fit better so I agree that this is the best crossbar for this situation, but I think you could move it down just a tad like you had mentioned and you'll be golden!
12 months ago
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Jeff Jenkins
@Samm McAlear Wow, thanks for putting in that effort! Glad you're getting more comfortable with giving feedback. I've found that looking at the work (good or bad) of others with a critical eye is a great learning tool. Cheers, man :)
12 months ago