The sunshine shading on the wooden part of the pencil is weird and the carved part looks as if its been bitten off. Introducing symmetry there must work. Also may be make the switch to a toggle-able on like in Wacom model pens. But all these since it is not going to be used and you asked for a good critique :)
Maybe change the tips for each pencil to add some uniqueness to the shaving's rim. Also the tip looks like plastic, there's no texture to the wood or graphite; unless you were going for a plastic look.
Other than that, it looks pretty neat.
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Pedja Rusic
Now before u guys say anything, i know pencil / pen are not the same thing, but think about this... I like the playstation move and how it looks, also i like pencils more than pens, and think the pencil has not been used in quite a while, so a mix of traditional pencil shape with a twist of a PSMove© controller, so the shape can actually be anything even a pickle lol. The important part to me is the button that allows the user to draw when pressed on some digital surface.
Now tell me if u guys see any thing that's missing etc.
Thx :)
over 2 years ago
It's missing some design errors man.
over 2 years ago
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Pedja Rusic
Well that's what im asking which ones?
This is not gonna be used but i just wanna get betr :)
over 2 years ago
Alright, you want one, I've got one :
Personally, I would have textured the wooden part with a wood texture... sorta.
But even that comment isn't objective as the plastic feeling of your wood is just pure logic with the concept.
over 2 years ago
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Prathyush
The sunshine shading on the wooden part of the pencil is weird and the carved part looks as if its been bitten off. Introducing symmetry there must work. Also may be make the switch to a toggle-able on like in Wacom model pens. But all these since it is not going to be used and you asked for a good critique :)
over 2 years ago
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Iconfinder
I like the oldschool feel of the pencils mixed with the digital button.
over 2 years ago
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Yummygum
Perfect! The swirly lines on the pencil's wood is awesome!
over 2 years ago
Maybe change the tips for each pencil to add some uniqueness to the shaving's rim. Also the tip looks like plastic, there's no texture to the wood or graphite; unless you were going for a plastic look.
Other than that, it looks pretty neat.
over 2 years ago