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Feedback, Plz

by Joshua Blankenship | August 25, 2010
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  1. Headshot Joshua Blankenship

    I'm unsure of the alternating shear angles, the kerning on "the" and "life," and whether the illustrated bits feel balanced enough overall.

    So... 1, 2, 3, go, Dribbble, go.

    over 1 year ago

  2. Pro Nothumbs-small Laura Kalbag

    The 'E's in 'THE' and 'LIFE' look like they could be a touch closer to the rest of the word.

    I also think the line that forms from THE's 'E', following the gap between the 'S' 'S' in BLESSED and down to LIFE's 'I' makes the gap between the 'SS' look wider than it is, so it could do with being slightly tighter.

    (Really hope that makes sense!)

    Otherwise, I think it is beautiful. That gold yellow is to die for.

    over 1 year ago

  3. Pro Ovan-320 oVan

    The alternating angles are a bit weird without some kind of ribbon behind them. I love the ornaments behind the Blessed though, so not sure how to improve it.

    over 1 year ago

  4. Cameron_daigle Cameron Daigle

    Looks dandy. If you insist on nitpicking, I'm seeing a little bit of LIF E.

    over 1 year ago

  5. Me-and-her Taylor Barriger

    Being nit-picky...
    - Do to the "the" being 3 letters and the "life" being 4... Plus, aligned the way they are... It feels a little off balance.
    - That's it though... Me likes it a lot.

    over 1 year ago

  6. Josh Josh Brewer

    I so want this to be more 3d-block-esque especially on "The" and "Life" it already feels like its heading that way. I am also assuming that you already tried "the" and "life" horizontally and didnt like it?

    over 1 year ago

  7. Zdfoster Zachary Foster

    For me it feels a little off balanced. For me, I would say that it needs to feel like it's hanging from a string...all have the same center axis. I think that will help since you're using the alternating shear angles.

    It's going to be a nice piece

    over 1 year ago

  8. Captain

    Shot_1282770184_teaser My Two Cents here is my 2 cents. straighten em out. wrap em in a circle and lighten up the black (if you can't because of the branding, thats cool too). The circles are ... August 25, 2010

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    My Two Cents

    by Matthew Spiel

    here is my 2 cents. straighten em out. wrap em in a circle and lighten up the black (if you can't because of the branding, thats cool too).

    The circles are a little off center with eachother, i tried em straight on center, but it looked wonky.

    Enjoy.

    over 1 year ago

  9. Pro Sombrero Chandler Van De Water

    I think Matthew came up with a great rebound here, Blankey. The only think I might suggest is that instead of pure circles, you maybe work in those flourishes.

    over 1 year ago

  10. Captain Matthew Spiel

    @Chandler - I totally agree with you! With a flourish or two it will really fill it out. My original thought was to make them look like some kind of fruit with some viney kind of nonsense... but, i didn't. I was afraid I would get too sucked in to the rebound : )

    over 1 year ago

  11. Headshot Joshua Blankenship

    @Zachary, the center axis is a solid idea to pursue. It'll make it feel a bit like a mobile, which might be fun.

    @Matthew, Definitely an interesting direction to take it in. Oddly enough, from the rebound thumbnail in your comment, I barely see the top and bottom of each respective circle, which reads like the flourishes—I'll try something along those lines.

    over 1 year ago

  12. Photo-2 Ray Frenden

    Hey, Josh. Good to see you on here. I haven't crashed into you on Flickr in a while. It's nice when communities are small-ish. Easier to find good stuff.

    over 1 year ago

  13. Pro Jesse Jesse J. Anderson

    I actually really love this, but Matthew's rebound direction is a nice alternative that ties it together a bit more.

    over 1 year ago

  14. Pro Img_0053 Ian Tearle

    Not read the comments, but "the" and "life" feel mis placed, perhaps flat would make this feel comfortable.

    Meh, my opinion any way.

    over 1 year ago

  15. Headshot

    Shot_1283100796_teaser Thanks, All Here's what I ended up with—killed the alternating shear angles, tightened the kerning, refined the flourishes (most of which are chopped up from Hoefler Tex... August 29, 2010

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    Thanks, All

    by Joshua Blankenship

    Here's what I ended up with—killed the alternating shear angles, tightened the kerning, refined the flourishes (most of which are chopped up from Hoefler Text Ornaments), and added a subtle graphical drop shadow that you can't quite see at this scale.

    Still not happy, but deadlines are deadlines. Live to fight another day.

    over 1 year ago

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