Well, here it is, my fourth (and final) logo design for my initial client pitch. Check the attachment for more detail.
Not sure whether I like this better with or without the ribbon. I was committed to the ribbon through the entire development of this concept, but at the very end of the vectorizing process, I tried a version without the ribbon, and I actually think it looks pretty cool.
LOL @ "stapp infection." Definitely not the first time I've heard that one, but it's still humorous to me.
And yeah, I seriously can't make up my mind about the ribbon. I may just present it with both, and say that the ribbon is an element that helps establish the overal visual language for the brand, and doesn't necessarily have to be in the logo, itself. The ribbon could be a repeating graphic element on packaging, stationery, or in-store graphics.
You are on fire Jon! Love to see the developments. I like this and it seemed to stand out. The ribbon is beautifully crafted but probably no need for it. Could you try wrapping 'sweet toof' across the top, leaving bakery where it is?
I like it very much; however I feel like the "L" looks a good deal like a "b" and I find that a bit confusing especially since my mind wants to read "tooth" because of the illustration.
First off, it has been awesome being able to see this process Jon! I really like all of the options that you have here. I think it may be worth presenting them as different options within the brand for different applications. I've found that sometimes enclosures such as this ribbon help fill the void so to speak on cleaner applications like a letterhead, while it may be beneficial on busier materials like a brochure with multiple photos to utilize the lockup without the ribbon.
It will really depend on how you set up the brand standards with preferred and secondary marks. I'm looking forward to seeing how everything turns out man! Your style is absolutely killer!
I like the ribbon version, but the lines texture might be too busy/too much going on. I'd say just keep the edge "stiches" but leave out the lines, so the type can stand out more. This is very lovely too, Jon, but the colors might be too feminine for a male-owned shoppe :-) My vote still goes to the pineapple tart logo.
Thanks for all the feedback, guys! I appreciate you checking this out.
@Rich, yeah, I thought briefly about trying a version in which 'sweet toof' wraps around the top, but that would require me going back to the drawing board (literally), scanning, retracing in Illustrator, tweaking bezier curves, etc., and unfortunately, time's up. Need to present these today. However, I think it's a valid option worth exploring, even as a secondary mark, so if my client chooses this direction, I will probably try working that out. Thanks for the suggestion.
@Jeff, actually, that L that looks like a B to you is actually an F. 'Sweet Toof.' Is there a legibility issue with the cursive? Anyone else not reading it properly?
Fantastic series with all of these concepts! Curious to see what direction the client will go with. I agree with the ideas for presenting the ribbon as an additional part of the branding, but as the main logo goes, I think this version looks great without. More focus on the beautiful lettering.
As for legibility here, I'm not seeing an 'L', but I can see where the potential confusion with a 'b' is coming from (that said, if it were a 'b', it'd be seriously falling off the baseline!) If this is the selected option, you could probably solve any confusion by narrowing/lengthening the lower loop a little. Anyway, all the best presenting the designs!
Nice illustration! I must say I think it will work better without the ornamental ribbon and keeping it more simple since the illustration already catches a lot of attention.
It might be worthwhile to give the crossbar of the t a bit more weight since compared to the other lettering it has far less contrast.
I really like it, but if I was the customer, I'd go for your first one. (although just the plain black version and not colorized, perhaps making it shiny to give the illusion of chocolate) I love the calligraphic touch and balance of that piece. Also, that way you would be far less bound to elements and should be able to implement them as you wish. If the logo is already extremely illustrative, adding more on letterheads, boxes etc. might be too much.
But of course that all depends on which other solutions you come up with ;) Great to be able to see all the process here and looking forward to seeing it implemented!
@Inka, appreciate the feedback. Actually, in the creative brief, the client did mention that the logo could feel somewhat "feminine."
@Claire, thank you so much for your expert typographer's eye. I can totally see where you're coming from, so if this is the direction the client chooses, I'll play around with that F.
@Arthur, good point about the crossbar of the T. I'll look into giving that a bit more weight. Thanks for your feedback, overall!
Sent my proposals and write-ups earlier this evening; will definitely let you know how it goes...
Dang, really well done. I'd thin the black line on the frosting by the bottom left just a tad, but other than that, everything else looks clean, great color.
I just love this. But i have to say, i do think the F on toof looks too much like an L. Even after reading the comments so i now know its actually an F, i still think L when i see it.
30 Responses (page 1 of 2)
Well, here it is, my fourth (and final) logo design for my initial client pitch. Check the attachment for more detail.
Not sure whether I like this better with or without the ribbon. I was committed to the ribbon through the entire development of this concept, but at the very end of the vectorizing process, I tried a version without the ribbon, and I actually think it looks pretty cool.
What do you think, guys? Ribbon or no ribbon?
over 1 year ago
stapp infection!
over 1 year ago
for real though, i'm leaning more towards without the ribbon, but that black and white looks so damn good with it. i'm tossed.
over 1 year ago
LOL @ "stapp infection." Definitely not the first time I've heard that one, but it's still humorous to me.
And yeah, I seriously can't make up my mind about the ribbon. I may just present it with both, and say that the ribbon is an element that helps establish the overal visual language for the brand, and doesn't necessarily have to be in the logo, itself. The ribbon could be a repeating graphic element on packaging, stationery, or in-store graphics.
over 1 year ago
damn, i thought i was being original there. lets see what others have to say about the ribbon...
over 1 year ago
Very cool!
over 1 year ago
You are on fire Jon! Love to see the developments. I like this and it seemed to stand out. The ribbon is beautifully crafted but probably no need for it. Could you try wrapping 'sweet toof' across the top, leaving bakery where it is?
over 1 year ago
Go with the Ribbon. Very nice!
over 1 year ago
I like it very much; however I feel like the "L" looks a good deal like a "b" and I find that a bit confusing especially since my mind wants to read "tooth" because of the illustration.
over 1 year ago
Awesome stuff!
over 1 year ago
First off, it has been awesome being able to see this process Jon! I really like all of the options that you have here. I think it may be worth presenting them as different options within the brand for different applications. I've found that sometimes enclosures such as this ribbon help fill the void so to speak on cleaner applications like a letterhead, while it may be beneficial on busier materials like a brochure with multiple photos to utilize the lockup without the ribbon.
It will really depend on how you set up the brand standards with preferred and secondary marks. I'm looking forward to seeing how everything turns out man! Your style is absolutely killer!
over 1 year ago
I like the ribbon version, but the lines texture might be too busy/too much going on. I'd say just keep the edge "stiches" but leave out the lines, so the type can stand out more. This is very lovely too, Jon, but the colors might be too feminine for a male-owned shoppe :-) My vote still goes to the pineapple tart logo.
over 1 year ago
Speechless....umm i quit
over 1 year ago
Thanks for all the feedback, guys! I appreciate you checking this out.
@Rich, yeah, I thought briefly about trying a version in which 'sweet toof' wraps around the top, but that would require me going back to the drawing board (literally), scanning, retracing in Illustrator, tweaking bezier curves, etc., and unfortunately, time's up. Need to present these today. However, I think it's a valid option worth exploring, even as a secondary mark, so if my client chooses this direction, I will probably try working that out. Thanks for the suggestion.
@Jeff, actually, that L that looks like a B to you is actually an F. 'Sweet Toof.' Is there a legibility issue with the cursive? Anyone else not reading it properly?
over 1 year ago
Fantastic series with all of these concepts! Curious to see what direction the client will go with. I agree with the ideas for presenting the ribbon as an additional part of the branding, but as the main logo goes, I think this version looks great without. More focus on the beautiful lettering.
As for legibility here, I'm not seeing an 'L', but I can see where the potential confusion with a 'b' is coming from (that said, if it were a 'b', it'd be seriously falling off the baseline!) If this is the selected option, you could probably solve any confusion by narrowing/lengthening the lower loop a little. Anyway, all the best presenting the designs!
over 1 year ago
Love the colors and the style!
over 1 year ago
Nice illustration! I must say I think it will work better without the ornamental ribbon and keeping it more simple since the illustration already catches a lot of attention.
It might be worthwhile to give the crossbar of the t a bit more weight since compared to the other lettering it has far less contrast.
I really like it, but if I was the customer, I'd go for your first one. (although just the plain black version and not colorized, perhaps making it shiny to give the illusion of chocolate) I love the calligraphic touch and balance of that piece. Also, that way you would be far less bound to elements and should be able to implement them as you wish. If the logo is already extremely illustrative, adding more on letterheads, boxes etc. might be too much.
But of course that all depends on which other solutions you come up with ;) Great to be able to see all the process here and looking forward to seeing it implemented!
over 1 year ago
@Inka, appreciate the feedback. Actually, in the creative brief, the client did mention that the logo could feel somewhat "feminine."
@Claire, thank you so much for your expert typographer's eye. I can totally see where you're coming from, so if this is the direction the client chooses, I'll play around with that F.
@Arthur, good point about the crossbar of the T. I'll look into giving that a bit more weight. Thanks for your feedback, overall!
Sent my proposals and write-ups earlier this evening; will definitely let you know how it goes...
over 1 year ago
Dang, really well done. I'd thin the black line on the frosting by the bottom left just a tad, but other than that, everything else looks clean, great color.
over 1 year ago
good luck buddy. 3 stellar variations.
over 1 year ago
I am in love with this.
over 1 year ago
I just love this. But i have to say, i do think the F on toof looks too much like an L. Even after reading the comments so i now know its actually an F, i still think L when i see it.
over 1 year ago
Steve, Matt, Sarper, Daniel, thank you kindly for the positive vibes.
@Steve, hmm, good eye. That stroke does look a little thick on the left side of the frosting/Toof. I'll see about toning that down just a tad.
over 1 year ago
That is flippin' awesome dude! Wowee.
over 1 year ago
Oh gawd...good luck to your client.
over 1 year ago